Month: March 2019

They Say/I Say Chapter 8

Key:

In my writing, I tend to use “and” much more than any other transition word. Another pattern I notice in my writing is that I repeat many of the key terms over and over again throughout my paper. I rely on repetition more than other devices discussed in this section of reading. When talking about a topic I tend to explain my ideas in new ways rather than expanding the ideas further. Adding more unique transition words and limiting pointing terms would overall make my writing stronger and more clear.

Yellow- Transitions

Blue- Pointing Terms

Purple- Key Terms/ Repetition

Peer Review 

Your essay does a great job of stating the textual evidence and creating an intriguing argument for why the arts and sciences should be combined. Your quotes are the perfect possible quotes to help support your thesis and really add to the overall strength of your paper. One thing your essay could really benefit from would be introducing pharmacy into your essay much sooner. You do a great job talking about art and science in general but creating a more personalized and focused paper, you would be able to go more in-depth on what you really want to say. All of your evidence and analyses are really strong and informative. Elaborating on what you already have down on paper would really enhance your paper.

You have a very strong writing style and are off to a great start.

Barclay Paragraphs 

Science is said to be the only way to explain life’s phenomenons. If it can not be explained in a scientific way, then is it really accurate? Jonah Lehrer challenges this idea in his article “The Future of Science… Is Art?” by stating, “One day, we believe, science will solve everything. But the trajectory of science has proven to be a little more complicated. The more we know about reality, the more palpable its paradoxes become”. Lehrer begins to develop the idea that science can complicate reality just as much as it explains it. There becomes a thin line between believing science is key and the disbelief that we will ever know all there is. In Steven Pinker’s essay titled, “Science Is Not Your Enemy”, he further develops this idea that science may not be the answer to everything by saying, “To understand the world, we must cultivate work-arounds for our cognitive limitations”. Both of these authors understand and explain that while science does set the basis for world ideas and how things work, we must be open to knowing that not everything is solely dependent on atoms and genes but can be influenced by many other aspects of life like religion and behavior.

Religion and science have a hard time mixing due to very extreme beliefs from each party. Many scientists believe they are right while many religious followers believe their philosophy and explanation is the only truth. Steven Pinker explains in his essay titled “Science Is Not Your Enemy” that, “The moral worldview of any scientifically literate person requires a radical break from religious conceptions of meaning and value”. Pinker’s point of view shows how he believes it is difficult to mix the religious and scientific mindset within the world. This exact dilemma has been floating around my mind for the past few months. I began attending church and while I enjoy the overall message, I continue to have a difficult time melding my scientific knowledge with the religious stories and explanations of why things occur. Pinker’s idea connected with my own personal experience shows that the complicated connection of science and religion is a real issue that many individuals know all too well.